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Critiquing hockey romance novels, of which there are many. Overthinking it is the point.
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Wednesday, December 31, 2014

Her Man Advantage: Post 15



Chapters 11: All the Angst

The next morning, Jennifer is at the practice rink, in the conference room, in order to get some work done. Her little sister, Julia, the one whose bullying experience is driving Jennifer to get funding to make the documentary on online bullying, gives her a call.

Back when we first met Jennifer, the text described the situation with her sister only minimally, and it came up again in conversation with Axel a bit later. At that point, Jennifer described it as her 15 year old sister having a crush on an older boy. Some junior girls discovered this and made a fake Facebook page for him, and started messaging her (as him) as if he liked her. Then they printed out all the private messages and circulated them around school (which seems like an unnecessary step—why not circulate them, y’know, on facebook?) When the boy found out, he was a jerk, too, making things worse. Jennifer helped her sister get into a new school.

“I had hoped she would stay and fight through it, but she just wanted to get away. She’s at a new school now and seems to have put it behind her” (82).

Thirty pages later, when Jennifer gets this phone call from Julia, she learns that her little sister is not, indeed, settling in, but in fact hates her new school and wants to go back to her old one. Her sister is conscientious enough that she’d tried to talk her principal into giving Jennifer (who paid for the private school) a partial refund on the tuition, although he’d refused, and has decided to get a part-time job in order to pay Jennifer aback.

Jennifer’s reaction is to refuse.

“I want you to attend a school where you’ll be happy. Where you don’t have people whispering behind your back” (114).

But Julia insists and even, quite logically, explains that she’s over it and that if she hadn’t freaked out, the school probably would have gotten over it quickly.

The first time I read this, I, in fact, misread it, thinking that here Julia was claiming that Jennifer had forced her to go to a school she didn’t want. (She does say “I know you would have liked to attend a school like this, but it’s not for me” 114). Which would have irritated me as it would have meant either the author forgot what she’d written earlier (that Jennifer wanted Julia to stay and fight) or that Jennifer willfully misremembers the situation. Instead it’s a bit more nuanced, which is good. It seems like Julia freaked out, along with Jennifer being protective, and since then Jennifer has embraced the new school thing. For example, she questions Julia on how she can get decent grades “with the distraction of online gossip and negative cliques using social media to wage a smear campaign?” (114) which … is not how I think you should be chatting with a 15 year old. That reads a lot more like the pitch one throws to financial backers of your social campaigning documentary…

And speaking of documentaries, Jennifer even says she’s got a film project in the works about this sort of thing and Julia panics and demands that Jennifer not do the film. She insists she won’t be “one of [her] causes” (115).

So this leaves Jennifer in a tizzy. But as readers, we know it also leaves an open door for Jennifer to find a new project that will enable her to stay with Axel. Because there’s only 30 pages of novel left, so we’ll have to wrap things up in another 15 or so. She doesn’t get time to ponder the situation, however, as Chelsea comes in, looking for coffee.

I’m a little curious as to why a woman who works at the arena gift shop is wandering into conference rooms in the practice rink looking for coffee, but apparently she’s there a lot and knows where all the ingredients are. This isn’t explained—it may just be something she’s picked up as a Magical Groupie being allowed to go wherever she wants. Or maybe the author forgot that the practice rink and arena are two separate things.

But has Chelsea gotten her car back since it’s early the next morning? If so, where are the other groupies? If not, how did she get here? Although she did say her apartment is close to the rink, so okay, she could have walked. But if so, why bother? Given the way she left things with Vincent a few hours before, and having gotten no sleep, as she tells Jennifer in a moment, is this really a practice her groupie-self needs to be at? Is she literally at every public practice? Because if yes, that’s not being a groupie, that’s being a stalker.

(Also, it just occurred to me one of the reasons why the author might have chosen to create a fictional Philadelphia team instead of using the Flyers. The Flyers don’t practice in Philadelphia, they practice in New Jersey. Of course, paying the NHL for the rights to use “Flyers” probably had something to do with that, too, but the book does reference the Stanley Cup and the NHL specifically, unlike Body Check.)

Anyway, Chelsea, despite the narrative assuring us earlier that she’s intensely private, tells Jennifer that she had a misunderstanding with Vincent and that they’ll not be a story for the documentary. This surprises Jennifer, having seen them be all Displaying Public Affection on the plane the day before. This leads to Chelsea asking rhetorically what if they just can’t get through all the obstacles, and Jennifer is in agreement, given her own situation. So this Scene of Woe and Angst closes the chapter.

Wednesday, September 17, 2014

Play the Man: Post 2



Chapter One: Outside the Couple

In the middle of chapter one, we meet two other characters, including our potential third player in this relationship: Nick. He’s another Blackhawks player, aged 21, who is described in terms of contrast with his fellow players and comparison with Jenna. Nick doesn’t normally go out with them, for example, and he isn’t drinking on this night out. When compared to Jenna, they’re much more in line than either character is with anyone else.

They were practically the same person sometimes in how they didn’t fit in and how they both interacted with the guys. They rolled their eyes during their crazy antics, laughed only when it was appropriate, and were quick to chastise them when they went too far (8).

On one hand, these two sound a bit unpleasant to have around when you’re having raucous fun. On the other hand, I’m not really a bar-person either, so I’d probably rather hang out with these two.

Nick looks at her engagement ring and jokes about how big it is, but he also points out seriously that in his opinion, “the ring should reflect the woman” (9). So we further see how in tune they are. However, Jenna says that since it’s Ryan’s style, wearing it is like having “a piece of him with me, on me, all the time” (9 emphasis original). That’s not a terrible way of looking at the situation, even if I think that someone proposing ought to know his/her significant other better and play to his/her style since s/he’s the one wearing it all the time.

Nick laughs at Jenna’s comment and quips, “And we both know how much he likes the idea of being on you all the time” (9). At first, this seems to come out of left field, not to mention being fairly crass humor for someone who had just one page before been described as being received as “stern, somber, and intense” (8). However, in the next perspective shift, we do see Ryan’s interaction with Jenna and it becomes clear.

What isn’t clear, though, is her response, “She cracked a full smile at that line, at his subtler humor” (9). To be fair, this line already hits one of my pet peeves. The narrative calls Nick’s humor “subtler” but doesn’t specify what his humor is more subtle than. Subtler than Ryan’s? Perhaps, but that is not at all clear. Furthermore, how is Nick’s comment, that Ryan likes to be on his fiancée all the time, particularly subtle? Remember, when reading the text chronologically, we have thus far only seen Ryan from Jenna’s perspective.

At any rate, Nick is clearly Ryan’s foil—quiet where Ryan is brash, sober where Ryan is drunk, appreciating Jenna as a person where Ryan treats her as an object.

Alex, another teammate, is Ryan’s other half.  They’re road roommates and best friends. (This makes this book pre-2013, because during the most recent lockout, the NHLPA negotiated that players get their own rooms now. Before that, you had to be a veteran of 600 games or 10 years to get your own room.) Alex’s first introduction is him telling Ryan (aka “Biggie”) that he should stop staring at Jenna because they’ll be married soon enough and he has his whole life to make gaga eyes at her. When Ryan accuses him of being jealous, Alex’s answer is very fratboy.

“Jealous? Of what? The fact that you only have one pussy for the rest of your life?” Alex shook his head and laughed. “I don’t envy you. I feel sorry for you” (10).

Classy. He banters with Jenna like this, too, going so far as to give her a ringpop and mock propose. I suspect we’ll hear more from him as the novel continues.