Chapter One: Introducing the
Engaged Couple
I’m
not sure what to expect with this novel. Body
Check provided so much fodder that I’m nervous that this one will suffer by
comparison. The title suggests there should be cross-dressing, Twelfth Night style hijinks but I’m
pretty damn sure that’s not the case, alas. Also, this is the third book in a
series, I believe, and I have not read the first two.
The
cover blurb: Jenna couldn’t be more
thrilled: after eight years of dating, she finally gets to marry her college
sweetheart and dream man, Chicago Blackhawks Captain Ryan Lisenbigler. While
Ryan loves his fiancée more than he can say, he’s in no rush to get to the
altar. As they struggle with their differing attitudes towards their upcoming
wedding, Ryan’s teammate Nick battles with his newfound, taboo feelings of
infatuation for Jenna. Emotions run high, and soon Jenna, Ryan, and Nick each
finding themselves having to make very difficult decisions regarding what they
want in love—and life—and what they’re willing to do in order to get it.
Okay,
reading that synopsis vaguely hints at a threesome, but I suspect that’s as
unlikely as wacky cross-dressing hijinks. Sadface.
Let’s
talk about the cover for a moment because it’s interesting. If you are unable
to see the image I’ll describe it. It’s a drawing, with a pink circle in the middle
which might be a pale version of a face-off dot, but I can’t guarantee that
that’s true because there’s also a line through the circle. In the center there
is a ring with a large pink gem. On either side is what I think is a hockey
stick but they are incredibly oddly shaped. They might be sticks as seen from
above at a faceoff. The sticks are wood, though, which makes very little sense
for a contemporary novel, and have white tape wrapped around the blades.
Irregular not-quite-cursive words sprawl across the entire cover, reading
“PLAY” and “MAN” in large text and “the” in very small text inside the ring.
The M and N of “MAN” curl around the hockey sticks’ blades.
The
overall appearance of the font suggests nothing so much as an octopus. That
might be hockey related, had the book been about the Detroit Redwings, given
the unfortunate tradition of that team’s fans tossing octopi onto the ice, but
in actuality this book is about the Chicago Blackhawks. The coloration loudly
declares that this is a “chick lit” book.
As
with our previous novel, the first chapter accomplishes the introductions,
although unlike Body Check we meet three
main characters. The entirety of the first chapter takes place in a bar, but
much of it is less scene and more holy-carp-backstory, which isn’t as exciting
as it could be.
Our
main character, Jenna, is contemplating her new engagement ring, which leads to
the masses of backstory. When the blurb says that Jenna is “finally” marrying
her college sweetheart, it isn’t kidding. They’ve been together already for
eight years, having met at Dartmouth. After Jenna graduated, Ryan was already
playing for the Blackhawks and asked her to join him in Chicago, which the
narrative assures us was his way of proposing commitment.
Evidently
it took his mother’s interference for him to finally propose. In fact, she
packed the picnic basket “with sparkling white wine, chocolates, cheese, and
fruit” and sent them out for fireworks.
For
reasons unclear to me, at this point the text switches to italics. I assume
it’s supposed to be a flashback, as it’s the scene of Ryan asking Jenna to
marry him, complete with dialogue and such, but it’s still odd since it was
already set up by the non-italicized bit earlier explain his mother set things
up. Since the scene is from Jenna’s perspective, I’m not sure how she could
have known that about Ryan’s mother.
The
overwhelming emotion that comes through in the description of Ryan’s proposal
is relief. Relief that finally he’d made it official, of course, since Jenna
had been waiting around for so long. But also relief that she hadn’t
disappointed her parents.
…they hated how he wouldn’t make
the big commitment to their daughter, and they didn’t appreciate that she was
willing to wait this long to get one. Her mother and father had a hard time
explaining to their socialite friends that their daughter still hadn’t married the man she had been dating since her freshman
year of college (6 emphasis original).
I
can understand putting in a lot of time into something and not wanting to stop
because you’ve already put that first amount of time in. But it reads like this
is why Jenna has stayed, mostly through inertia and a fear of having wasted
time. This pressure from her parents is equally problematic. Why should Jenna
care if her parents have trouble with their “socialite friends”? She’s not
there with them. One should not base one’s life decisions on one’s parents’
opinions, particularly when their opinions are based on difficulty with their
snobby friends. Apparently her parents even pressured her to give Ryan an
ultimatum.
But,
now she’s engaged and she is at a bar along with the entire Chicago Blackhawks
team, celebrating. Except she’s not really celebrating because she’s not
particularly into crowds or bars. Also, the Blackhawks seem like asshats.
All
right, let me back up here. The real life, our world, NHL Chicago Blackhawks
are my least favorite NHL team in part because they really do seem like
asshats. Also, their fans, at least when they come to my team’s arena, are
jerks. Doesn’t matter if their team wins or loses, they’re awful to the
opposing team’s fans.
So
that may color my view of the fictional Blackhawks in this book, but I kind of
don’t think so.
…but she knew the guys were
horrible tippers. They weren’t stingy, by any means, but they just didn’t
understand that the concept of twenty
percent didn’t compute when they left the place trashed in their wake (7
emphasis original).
Specifically,
Ryan seems to be a bit of an asshat, too. Or, perhaps more accurately very
self-absorbed.
For
example, Ryan’s choice of engagement ring for Jenna is entirely not her
style—she describes it as his. The narrative tells us that Jenna “was a simple
girl” and that a “traditional solitaire” would have fit her personality best.
What Ryan chose better suited him, as “outgoing and boisterous and, yes, a
little gaudy” (7).
It was a cushion-cut,
two-and-a-half carat pink diamond set in white gold, in a diamond-encrusted
micro-pave mounting (7).
I
don’t know what half of that means (and I don’t currently have internet access
to look it up) but starting with pink and ending in encrusted, it sounds pretty
awful to me.
When
the scene switches to Ryan’s perspective, the narrative tells us that he thinks
Jenna “was a drag when she came out with the boys” and he enjoys himself more
without her. He calls her “uptight” and not “sexy, but rather…a classic beauty”
(10). His reason for waiting so long to ask Jenna to marry him is that he’s “only twenty-seven” (emphasis original).
Later, we see that “Ryan grabbed his Jenna’s hand” (12). His possessiveness via
the narrative is disturbing. It must be an
authorial choice in that without “his” there it reads just as clearly. (There
are no other Jennas in the scene.)
Oddly,
the narrative slips into Jenna’s POV for a moment and while that’s not
particularly consistent writing, the little blip tells readers a lot about this
couple.
Ryan took his seat…then he snaked
an arm around her waist and pulled her into his lap. Jenna thought it was too
intimate of a position for present company, but he wouldn’t let her get up (12).
Again,
Ryan is staking his claim on Jenna, just as with the enormous engagement ring,
his inner thoughts calling her “his,” and putting her on his lap in front of
all of his teammates, including his best friend who had been flirting with her.
He isn’t too concerned about her leaving him. His reaction to his mother
telling him that he might lose her was that “Jenna was so much a part of him
that she would never leave him or do anything to hurt him” (10) so his claim
isn’t to keep her with him; it’s too show her off, to show everyone else what
he has. She’s valued as an object.
When
Jenna goes to get another beer for Ryan, we get further insight into this
relationship and how Ryan values his fiancée.
Even after eight years together,
she had never stopped putting in the effort needed to maintain their
relationship. She didn’t come home after a long day and immediately put on
ugly, frumpy sweatpants. She cooked all his meals… (14).
All
of this would be fine, particularly as we also learn that he’s very attracted
to her and considers her a “caring, loving, thoughtful woman (14). However, we
don’t see any reciprocation. When Jenna describes Ryan, it’s in terms of her
love for him. This strikes me as a terrible relationship, which I think is the
author’s intent, and not worth saving, which I’m not sure is the author’s
intent.
This
third break of the chapter switches perspectives several times (Ryan pages 9-12,
Nick (one of the teammates) 12, Jenna 12, Nick 12, Jenna 12-13, Ryan 13, Jenna
13, Nick 14, Jenna 15.) You could argue, I suppose, that this scene has simply
become omniscient, but there’s no division between the 3 pages of Ryan’s
perspective into omniscient the way that there is between the section of
Jenna’s POV or Nick’s. It’s distracting, and frankly an editor ought to have
taken it out. And yet, there’s important character information conveyed here,
more so than in the single-perspective scenes that rely so heavily on
flashback. Still, jumping from head to head, perspective to perspective, is
distracting and problematic, and I sincerely hope it doesn’t continue
throughout the novel.
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